Here is a piece of my latest piece of writing.
My next steps for this story is to start using apostrophes, colons, semi-colons, ellipses and brackets.
I would also like to get more description into my writing so it will pull the reader in more.
The day I’ll never forget was at school one day...
I was at school when the fire alarm went off at lunch break, I was in the library at the time.
The teacher in the library told us to put down our books and go out to the courts.
As I went out the door, I caught my foot on a sharp rusty nail sticking out of the ground.
I limped across to the courts with my leg dragging behind.
It was like a herd of purple zebras were charging towards the courts.
We lined up in our year groups and the teacher’s from each class called out our names one by one.
The teacher in the library told us to put down our books and go out to the courts.
As I went out the door, I caught my foot on a sharp rusty nail sticking out of the ground.
I limped across to the courts with my leg dragging behind.
It was like a herd of purple zebras were charging towards the courts.
We lined up in our year groups and the teacher’s from each class called out our names one by one.
Suddenly a line of black Land Rovers with black tinted windows, broke through the metal pole
sticking up in the middle of the gate they drove onto the terf
and skidded to a halt in a cloud of dark grey dust.
All of a sudden men in black protective gear with sub-machine guns tightly
strapped to their chest jumped out of the cars and told us to line up on the road outside
the school gates. We all moved quickly out of the gates and lined up again it was really scary.
sticking up in the middle of the gate they drove onto the terf
and skidded to a halt in a cloud of dark grey dust.
All of a sudden men in black protective gear with sub-machine guns tightly
strapped to their chest jumped out of the cars and told us to line up on the road outside
the school gates. We all moved quickly out of the gates and lined up again it was really scary.
While we were lining up a stream of emergency vehicles parked on the road and blocked it up.
We could hear a loud droning noise over our heads and I looked up and saw
4 large Black Hawk Helicopters dropping down onto the front field behind the Land Rovers.
Men with black clothes and a line of words on the back saying BOMB DISPOSAL TEAM
jumped out of the helicopters and ran over to the School classroom blocks and started
sweeping the buildings looking for the bomb. Suddenly one of them called out “the bombs
are in the roof of the classroom 4.” They all ran towards the room I could hear the stomping
footsteps of all the men. One by one they disappeared into the class.
You could hear them calling out things the whole hour they were in there.
4 large Black Hawk Helicopters dropping down onto the front field behind the Land Rovers.
Men with black clothes and a line of words on the back saying BOMB DISPOSAL TEAM
jumped out of the helicopters and ran over to the School classroom blocks and started
sweeping the buildings looking for the bomb. Suddenly one of them called out “the bombs
are in the roof of the classroom 4.” They all ran towards the room I could hear the stomping
footsteps of all the men. One by one they disappeared into the class.
You could hear them calling out things the whole hour they were in there.
They came out and told us that the school would be closed for the next week.
We all went home and that was the end of The Day I’ll Never Forget.
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